Hard to pick favorite scenes out of this, but the Doctor and Jack holding hands was beautiful. I loved all the places you made it clear that Jack might be broken, but he'll get better some day, and he can still reach out to other people and appreciate all the wonders of the worlds around him. I was very glad the Doctor remembered and didn't leave Jack alone at the end! Can't wait for the rest! :)

(Yes, Holmes likes your story a lot. Don't question his authority. *g*)